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Nikku |
Posted: January 22, 2005 07:12 am
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Mr. Coke Group: Old BB:S Betatesters Posts: 3114 Joined: December 12, 2004 |
can some at leat agknowledge/feedback my story, i wana write more, but i need somefeed back first!
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Nikku |
Posted: January 22, 2005 10:34 pm
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Mr. Coke Group: Old BB:S Betatesters Posts: 3114 Joined: December 12, 2004 |
it would be great if i got some feedback
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OneoftheLost |
Posted: January 23, 2005 06:01 am
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Zombie Hunter Group: Members Posts: 164 Joined: December 12, 2004 |
er....uh....interesting.. j/k its pretty good so far! keep it up...one question i could be wrong here....but what rank is Cain? and if he is a trainee he has no athority whatsoever telling thsoe guys what to do.I probably misssed taht part. Second. ALL PARATROOPERS HAVE RADIOS while on a Training drop. So thsi begs the question..why the hell not stay in the cave? it would be standard procedure to call sarge, and sit one yur sorry asses and wait for him...guess im jsut looking for problems with the story....DAMNIT NIKKU I CANT FIND ALL THAT MANY! oh well keep it up I need more story so i can REALLY rate it.............
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Nikku |
Posted: January 23, 2005 08:37 pm
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Mr. Coke Group: Old BB:S Betatesters Posts: 3114 Joined: December 12, 2004 |
in next part of story u find his rank- it might even be raised. He is his Squad leader, read the story over again. When he hit the ground his radio broke, explains why he can't use his, and he onyl picks up berkenson's signal. Also the only way to get out of that training mission was to kill the 4 screamers!
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Nikku |
Posted: January 25, 2005 09:22 pm
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Mr. Coke Group: Old BB:S Betatesters Posts: 3114 Joined: December 12, 2004 |
anymore comments?! qeustions? someone psot one then i will make new part-o-story
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-=Jouni=- |
Posted: January 25, 2005 09:43 pm
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Elite zombie Butcher Group: Members Posts: 1456 Joined: December 07, 2004 |
A lot of scifi stories coming up..
Yeah yeah its nice, but why you need feedback after each episode/part? |
Nikku |
Posted: January 25, 2005 09:51 pm
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Mr. Coke Group: Old BB:S Betatesters Posts: 3114 Joined: December 12, 2004 |
thier is like 3/4 sci fi stories now, and i just like to kno that ppl are still reading it, just a saftey measure.....
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hunter |
Posted: January 25, 2005 10:34 pm
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Fantasma Cazador Group: Old BB:S Betatesters Posts: 3702 Joined: December 08, 2004 |
h aha ha aha hot plasma wtfs going on sounds like halo ns doom and full metal jacket all in one silly
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Nikku |
Posted: January 25, 2005 11:01 pm
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Mr. Coke Group: Old BB:S Betatesters Posts: 3114 Joined: December 12, 2004 |
Wow, that sounded really ignorant. HALO isn't the only reference to plasma gun/rifles/weapons and it surely isn't the first! so, how is it doom, im making everything up, not taking stuff froom movies/other stuff
in a little bit it will sound like a movie, probualy which no one ever saw though -------------------- Only when you gick, will you truly fish...
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TheBlazeUK |
Posted: January 26, 2005 02:13 am
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Real zombie Nemesis Group: BB Betatesters Posts: 398 Joined: December 13, 2004 |
No problems with using a plasma rifle. If you're going to be so hard on him for using typical sci-fi stuff why are you even playing this mod? Startlingly enough there were zombies (and yes, zombies in a mall) in several movies waaay before this. Most fiction is completely plagarised from other sources - conventions like lasers, plasma guns, spaceships, cryostorage etc are all established concepts that people use all the time in stories.
Basically, soldiers in the future have futuristic weapons and go to futuristic places. If the gateway to hell opens up and the spawn of satan sweep through a scientific base whilst an alien race attack and the hero becomes a cyborg commando then you can say hes ripping it off. Woulda been nice if youd used "GET YOUR ASS TO MARS" in an austrian accent One thing, you're slipping between tenses every now and again - the last post starts with "They have" which = present tense, but later on its "The marines retreated" which = past tense. -------------------- Like zombies? read comics? read The Walking Dead by Robert Kirkman, from Image
No Cable TV No grocery stores No government In a world ruled by the dead, we are forced to start living Documents of the dead - newspapers etc from the fall of the earth. The Living and The Dead My zombie horror story. Feel free to leave feedback. |
Nikku |
Posted: January 26, 2005 02:20 am
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Mr. Coke Group: Old BB:S Betatesters Posts: 3114 Joined: December 12, 2004 |
ok, thank blaze, i didn't mean to do that obvisouly...... i don't understand what
what does that mean, what movies are you talkin' about? lol...
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TheBlazeUK |
Posted: January 26, 2005 02:37 am
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Real zombie Nemesis Group: BB Betatesters Posts: 398 Joined: December 13, 2004 |
"Get your ass to mars" - Total Recall, Arnie Schwarzenegger,
It basically meant people rip off older ideas all the time without even realising it, nothing wrong with it. A gun that fires superheated energy is a good idea, its been used before and it will be again. Theres only so much that can be made up. -------------------- Like zombies? read comics? read The Walking Dead by Robert Kirkman, from Image
No Cable TV No grocery stores No government In a world ruled by the dead, we are forced to start living Documents of the dead - newspapers etc from the fall of the earth. The Living and The Dead My zombie horror story. Feel free to leave feedback. |
Nikku |
Posted: January 26, 2005 04:29 am
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Mr. Coke Group: Old BB:S Betatesters Posts: 3114 Joined: December 12, 2004 |
agreed, lol I kno, evenutauly people mill make everything up, and everything will jsut be the same......that sucks......
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hunter |
Posted: January 26, 2005 06:14 pm
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Fantasma Cazador Group: Old BB:S Betatesters Posts: 3702 Joined: December 08, 2004 |
its like doom 3 cos dooms on mars plus there silly flying monsters sounds like doom and i know zombies are science fiction why would that meen i dont like them get your facts right :lol:oh and i said its liek ns doom 3 an dfull metal jacket didnt say he was ripping it off the only thing i said was the hot plasma thingy
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Nikku |
Posted: January 26, 2005 06:22 pm
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Mr. Coke Group: Old BB:S Betatesters Posts: 3114 Joined: December 12, 2004 |
alot of things are on Mars, "silly" flying monsters, wow u are ignorant how are they silly, And for your information, I NEVER PLAYED ANY DOOM GAMES. Its not like NS its completely orgiganil, al the things are from me and the little man that sits on my shoulder, so STFU. Last itme i checked this story isn't Silly, i think that you have been sucking to much "silly" gas....
my facts are striaght you are just putting that in your post to make yourself look correct, oh yeah I'Ms NOT RIPPING OFF PLASMA, PLASMA IS THE 4th PHASE OF MATTER (science), THE IDEA OF PUTTING IT IN A GUN IS USED BY ALOT OF PEOPLE SO IT'S NOT "RIPPING OFF" OR STEALING IDEAS.... Oh yeah, i suggest you learn to type so that people can understand you better -------------------- Only when you gick, will you truly fish...
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