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Nikku |
Posted: December 18, 2004 03:05 am
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Mr. Coke Group: Old BB:S Betatesters Posts: 3114 Joined: December 12, 2004 |
[Note: Strath Haven middle school is real, all students are real.]
Chapter One: The Day Spanish Class Sucked More Then Ever I walked in through the door of room 101 aka hell, when the bell rang. My Spanish teacher was a full blown Jackass. "Nico, you're Late, you have a detention" He said. "Mother Fucker." I whispered. The Spanish teacher looked me in the eyes and pointed to a desk. I walked over to the Desk and sat down, and began my normal day dreaming routine in Spanish class. Goddamn, What made Mr. Guatch such a jackkass. All the kids called him Mr. Douche. Everyone hated him. I started to drift of into the never ending void of sleep, one good thing about having hiar in front of your eyes is well, that you can sleep in boring classes. "Nico, pay attention!" yelled Mr. Douche. "My real name is Nick not Nico or whatever." I answered back. "Fine, wiwse guy, another detetion" Mr. Douche siad. After 20 minutes of Hell i realized something was wrong with Chris is the front row. He fell out of his desk and his head hit the floor. He jsut layed thier for about 5 minutes when someone, I think it was Jasmin the Girl next to him siad "Chris What the heck-". She was Cut off by chris jumping up and letting out a Loud, ear drum breaking, Blood curtling Scream. All I could say was "What The Fuck?" Before Chris jumped at Mr. Douche and started ripping him into shreds the only thing i could think to my self was "Awwwww, Fuck. What should i do? This sounds like something out a a Zombies movie. What is the place with strong doors? The Gym." I jumped out of my seat Grabbed my Firend Charlie and Anthonoy and Told them my plan. WE darted out the room. We changered up the stairs. We where on the secound floor. then we saw the stairs to the main floor. We jumped down all 10 of the stiars and darted to the Gym. Once we where in the gym we shut the doors and Locked them with the huge steel bars. There were 4 sets of movable bleachers. all 3 of us moved on in front of each door. We went into the Sport Exquitement closet and looked for anything to arm our self with. ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- -------------------- Only when you gick, will you truly fish...
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Nikku |
Posted: December 18, 2004 04:15 am
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Mr. Coke Group: Old BB:S Betatesters Posts: 3114 Joined: December 12, 2004 |
FEED BACK, COMMENTS, ANYTHING
-------------------- Only when you gick, will you truly fish...
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BrainStew |
Posted: December 18, 2004 04:29 am
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Zombie Hunter Group: Members Posts: 110 Joined: December 03, 2004 |
I like it. The spanish teacher in the story sound like my french teacher. I have long hair too so I can also fall asleep without them knowing
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Nikku |
Posted: December 18, 2004 04:31 am
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Mr. Coke Group: Old BB:S Betatesters Posts: 3114 Joined: December 12, 2004 |
THANKS ! i love when ppl love my stories, that Spanish teacher, along with another and charlie are real names and real people, i got sick of the Mr. Douche (WE really do call him that, but english is his 5th luange so it sounds the same to him, god i hate mr. Douche)
so i wrote story, story aint over yet i need to take a break then there will be more!!!! -------------------- Only when you gick, will you truly fish...
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Nikku |
Posted: December 24, 2004 12:56 am
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Mr. Coke Group: Old BB:S Betatesters Posts: 3114 Joined: December 12, 2004 |
FEED BACK!
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Outlaw289 |
Posted: December 24, 2004 02:17 am
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Just another Survivor Group: Members Posts: 25 Joined: December 19, 2004 |
I think they shoudl have responded with a little more confusion. Let Chris tear up a few more kids before you and your buds catch on. Also, make it so the police have to come rescue you or something.
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Lord_Of_The_Pings |
Posted: December 24, 2004 07:39 pm
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Experienced Killer Group: Members Posts: 57 Joined: December 12, 2004 |
Excellent story, but maybe your "heroes" for want of a better term should take as many people with them as possible I sure as hell know that I would (especially the girls ).
So far this story has a lot of potential, go with it! |
Nikku |
Posted: December 24, 2004 07:57 pm
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Mr. Coke Group: Old BB:S Betatesters Posts: 3114 Joined: December 12, 2004 |
ok well i feel inspired,
--------------------------------------------------------------------- ------------------------------------ COmments? This post has been edited by Nikku on July 07, 2008 09:20 pm -------------------- Only when you gick, will you truly fish...
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Lord_Of_The_Pings |
Posted: December 24, 2004 08:21 pm
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Experienced Killer Group: Members Posts: 57 Joined: December 12, 2004 |
Take your time a bit more, for example think about lockers being knocked over, fire alarms, perhaps the possiblity of other students thinking and comming up with ideas, instead of being helpless sacrifices in the plot of the story.
Also perhaps your group can have some more charachters, like school psychopaths and chemistry freaks, hell even cheerleaders, I mean someone's gotta do the handywork and of course the screaming ;D Keep up the good work. |
Nikku |
Posted: December 24, 2004 08:54 pm
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Mr. Coke Group: Old BB:S Betatesters Posts: 3114 Joined: December 12, 2004 |
nigger cock
This post has been edited by Nikku on July 07, 2008 09:21 pm -------------------- Only when you gick, will you truly fish...
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TheSecondOne |
Posted: December 25, 2004 12:41 am
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Real zombie Nemesis Group: Members Posts: 321 Joined: December 14, 2004 |
Violence! Hooray!
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I've been chosen You think it's over But I'm ready to go I am what you fear I've been chosen The world as you know it just died It's the end of all time *Heavensgate* |
moecomputer |
Posted: December 26, 2004 03:20 am
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Zombie Hunter Group: Members Posts: 120 Joined: December 23, 2004 |
Your story is totally funny.
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Nikku |
Posted: December 26, 2004 03:36 am
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Mr. Coke Group: Old BB:S Betatesters Posts: 3114 Joined: December 12, 2004 |
thanks, what is the most LOL part?!
-------------------- Only when you gick, will you truly fish...
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Grey Snake |
Posted: December 26, 2004 09:18 pm
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Clean up Crew Group: BB Betatesters Posts: 1295 Joined: November 16, 2004 |
when you and katy kissed. In real life is she your girlfriend or do you have a crush on her? anyways its really good. Please keep it up!
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Grey Snake |
Posted: December 30, 2004 08:43 pm
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Clean up Crew Group: BB Betatesters Posts: 1295 Joined: November 16, 2004 |
you gonna finish?
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